My second technical exercise on the a57 - up close with some old machinery.
Mostly old manual glass - MD Rokkor 50mm + 2x converter on bellows, with glassless converter
Ambient sound recorded onto the camera from an Rode NT3. Music: Portions of JS Bach's Toccata in Dminor, the rest original. Performed and recorded from a Yamaha DGX690, then all edited in Reaper.
Edited in Corel VideoStudio 5.
4 afternoons effort
Note that the Vimeo version [link] is of significant higher colour and tonal quality than the dA HD render. Send me a note if you would like the original 44MB (7Mbs) version.
All comments and feedback appreciated - anything that will make for a better product!
You told that it was in your mind a short in steampunk style. That's well represented I think in the middle of the video, while there is the gears movement overimpression. Then the only two evident defect that I see are in the first few seconds: the red wire is a great idea but there is a sort of hesitation... Not sure if it was done with intention. The other point that gives away from the steampunk idea is around the final when there is the final handcraft removed from the sew machine. It is a too "human" gesture and may appear a bit out of contest.
The red 'wire' is standard sewing cotton. I had a good number of goes threading the needle. Do you know how hard it is to thread a sewing machine needle smoothly in front of a camera! I have cut around it a bit - possibly I should have slowed the video a little - that might have helped with the jerkiness. Overall, stability with macro is seriously challenging, and even the mercalli filter didn't help much.
The penultimate scene is certainly not steampunk in any sense. I suppose its an attempt at a 'resolution', making it clear what the preceding scenes are about. It should be a piece of leather (or at least vinyl), to be in a steampunk idea.
I think overall, as Steve (pearwood) said, its not really very steampunk. I would have needed to manage the lighting better - far more orange flame-like highlights, and darker shadows, etc, and then in post upped the contrast and/or gamma to something a bit more scary. And then more pounding hammers in the sound track. Interesting thought...!
Thank you for the time and consideration - and support - it's really appreciated!